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proximoception ([personal profile] proximoception) wrote2010-11-08 12:24 am

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Every Chinese poem ever:

The rain falls gently on the stream
The stream runs softly past my house
My house slumps slowly down the hill
The hill stirs greenly with the breeze
The breeze moves shyly through the night
The night swirls lightly round the moon
The moon crawls swiftly up your leg
Your leg kicks sadly at the crane
The crane flaps loudly in the rain
My love is in some other town

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[11/23 edit - let's cut the adverbs:

The rain falls on the stream
The stream runs past my house
My house slumps down the hill
The hill stirs with the breeze
The breeze moves through the night
The night swirls round the moon
The moon crawls up your leg
Your leg kicks at the crane
The crane flaps in the rain
My love is in some other town

Or: My love is in some town]

[identity profile] maga-dogg.livejournal.com 2010-11-08 06:43 am (UTC)(link)
If male I am aging and drunk
If female, I am totally letting myself go
In a kind of fetishy dishabille manner

[identity profile] proximoception.livejournal.com 2010-11-09 03:34 pm (UTC)(link)
Nice.

brilliant!

[identity profile] jones-casey.livejournal.com 2010-11-09 02:55 am (UTC)(link)
the town i'm in doesn't understand love

(hollywood, los angeles)

Re: brilliant!

[identity profile] proximoception.livejournal.com 2010-11-09 03:35 pm (UTC)(link)
Probably an indefensible number of adverbs.

What movies understand love best I wonder.