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I came into the rooming house
With just a trunk and cough
And readiness to rest and rouse
And once again set off

They put me in room number one
A girl in silks lived there
They had
once she did what she done
To cut me from her hair

In two there was a lady stern
Who frowned me down to earth
But soon each other's joke we'd learn
And part all full of mirth

In three there was a living flame
Who blackened me inside her
When I was done you'd see a dame
Who wouldn't scare a spider

In four I had the law laid down
By rules dressed up as woman
By May so vast her eyes had grown
That you could fit the room in

Five I can't remember well
Nor her that dwelt inside it
But now my kneecaps hurt like hell
And now my mind's divided

Last I ended up in six
Where Agnes did me kindly
But Tom and Greta joined the mix
And in the hall I find me

I'm going from the rooming house
Now trunkless but quite coughless
If God had made me more the spouse
I swear I'd wander off less

Date: 2010-11-10 02:36 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] nightspore.livejournal.com
Like.

And love that last rhyme.

Date: 2010-11-10 06:00 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] thelican.livejournal.com
It's great. And I love the last rhyme,too.

The story of your relationship?

Date: 2010-11-10 06:41 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] proximoception.livejournal.com
I categorically deny having ever been hair-entangled, frowned upon, laughed with, flame-blackened, rule-beset, kneesore, divided-minded, or in any nonstandard grouping with anyone named Tom.

Date: 2010-11-10 09:32 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] thelican.livejournal.com
But, you know, figuratively speaking.

Date: 2010-11-10 10:07 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] proximoception.livejournal.com
As if the story of a house
Were told or ever could be

Date: 2010-11-11 05:06 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] thelican.livejournal.com
Wow. That poem is fantastic.

I'd never heard of it, or Robinson. But wow.

Date: 2010-11-10 06:26 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] all-unnecessary.livejournal.com
Lines 6-8 completely befuddle me. Can you please do the tiresome thing and explain it to me?

Date: 2010-11-10 06:28 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] proximoception.livejournal.com
In the room was a girl who wore silk stuff.

After she did to him what she did to him they had to cut him out of her hair.

*WHO EVEN KNOWS WHAT SHE DID TO HIM*

Watch out for girls wearing silk stuff.

Date: 2010-11-10 06:39 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] all-unnecessary.livejournal.com
Ahhh, invisible commas after "had" and "done"!

As if you were a piece of chewing gum. And she were a jockey.

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